Paintballers Conquer the Universe

stevedavidson · 05-05-2008, 02:48 PM

chapter two is up on my site for those who are following along.

You'll get introduced to the Empire of Evil Paintball Company...

Horizon · 05-05-2008, 03:32 PM

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Originally Posted by stevedavidson

chapter two is up on my site for those who are following along.

You'll get introduced to the Empire of Evil Paintball Company...

Do you mind posting a link Steve?

Painthappy · 05-05-2008, 04:16 PM

Here's the link:

Rim Worlds Welcome

stevedavidson · 05-05-2008, 08:32 PM

I didn't want to wear out my welcome here - and links to the story are in other (science fiction) threads on MCB.

Given the number of views of those threads, I assume some folks have checked things out - but I've heard nothing back. Its really out there for critique and suggestions and commentary - otherwise I'd just be finishing it up and sending it off to a publisher...

Remember: "You can only fit so many mouths around a sphincter before someone’s got to go."

Painthappy · 05-05-2008, 08:35 PM

I haven't read it myself yet, as I haven't found the time, but I'm looking forward to it.

CB

stevedavidson · 05-10-2008, 08:22 PM

Chapter 3 - A Declaration of War Lost in Translation, is up on my site.

A very important piece of paintball technology, invented by a well-known individual, makes its first appearance here.

See if you can guess who it is.

Amoryl · 05-11-2008, 02:18 PM

I'm reading it through it, seems quite humorous so far (which i sincerely hope is the point)

as for what we discussed earlier, if you can pm me a few specific parts/scenes you'd like me to work from, that'd be better then me trying to figure out a few on my own.

stevedavidson · 05-11-2008, 03:01 PM

YAY - first comment!

Thanks.

It is intended to be a comedy. Its also a first draft and I will undoubtedly be going back through and adding or deleting some things (as well as copy editing).

I'm writing it episodically. I've got the entire outline of the story, my main groups of characters (not all of whom have been introduced at this point in time), and I have a pretty good idea going in what the next chapter will be. When I finish a chapter, I make the final decision on where we're going next, pick a name for the chapter, post that name (under 'coming soon') on the website and continue on.

For those who know SF - my inspirations for this piece are Harry Harrison and Eric Frank Russell, two of the funniest SF authors I know. For want of a better word, I'm 'borrowing' Harrisons method of delivery from such works as Bill, The Galactic Hero and 'Star Smashers of the Galaxy Rangers', and Russell's sarcastic tone, from such works as Wasp! and The Space Willies.

And of course, the paintball industry, which is often so ridiculous that its funny.

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Originally Posted by Amoryl

I'm reading it through it, seems quite humorous so far (which i sincerely hope is the point)

as for what we discussed earlier, if you can pm me a few specific parts/scenes you'd like me to work from, that'd be better then me trying to figure out a few on my own.

Amoryl · 05-11-2008, 10:06 PM

you might also like Robert Asprin's "fools company" books, at least the first several, after that they start slipping.

alpha434 · 05-12-2008, 12:03 AM

Will there be a scenario game follow up?

05-05-2008, 02:48 PM	#1 (permalink)
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Painthappy I Am The Admin Join Date: Mar 2006 Location: New Boston, NH	I haven't read it myself yet, as I haven't found the time, but I'm looking forward to it. CB __________________ Always stick around for one more drink. That's when things happen. Vids- http://www.youtube.com/painthappy Pics- http://www.flickr.com/photos/paintballphotos/ The greatest trick the Devil ever pulled was convincing the world he didn't exist.

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Amoryl Post Whore Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: San Francisco	I'm reading it through it, seems quite humorous so far (which i sincerely hope is the point) as for what we discussed earlier, if you can pm me a few specific parts/scenes you'd like me to work from, that'd be better then me trying to figure out a few on my own. __________________ Amoryl's Feedback Sometimes I Draw Stuff

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Amoryl Post Whore Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: San Francisco	you might also like Robert Asprin's "fools company" books, at least the first several, after that they start slipping. __________________ Amoryl's Feedback Sometimes I Draw Stuff

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stevedavidson Active Member Join Date: Aug 2007	I didn't want to wear out my welcome here - and links to the story are in other (science fiction) threads on MCB. Given the number of views of those threads, I assume some folks have checked things out - but I've heard nothing back. Its really out there for critique and suggestions and commentary - otherwise I'd just be finishing it up and sending it off to a publisher... Remember: "You can only fit so many mouths around a sphincter before someone’s got to go."

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stevedavidson Active Member Join Date: Aug 2007	Chapter 3 - A Declaration of War Lost in Translation, is up on my site. A very important piece of paintball technology, invented by a well-known individual, makes its first appearance here. See if you can guess who it is.

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